Some people believe that children should listen to and obey their parents. Others believe that children should think and do things on their own. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
With the proliferation of contemporary lifestyles breeds a wide range of dilemmas in the parenting role. Indeed, the question of whether children should be completely obedient their parents, or should act independently according to their thoughts has been a debatable issue in the education field. Although obeying the parents could be beneficial to some extents, I would argue that children should be given the opportunity to think on their own.
On the one hand, some people claim that offspring should act in obedience because of several reasons, which are related to the valuable experiences from their parents and the healthy relationship with family members. With regard to the former, children could easily make wrong decisions due to insufficient appropriate guidance from adults. A typical example for this is that homeless children are likely to commit the crimes than the ones from normal families, which are provided with full of useful advice from their fathers and mothers. Another reason is that children who are obedient tend to have happier relationships with their parents because they could avoid unnecessary arguments, which may increase the pressure on relationships.
On the other hand, I believe that in spite of numerous benefits of obeying parents, letting children make their own decisions could result in more favourable outcomes. The most prominent of which would be that these individuals will be more independent and confident than the ones obeying totally to the parents’ orders. This is due to the fact that these children will face many challenges and obstacles that they need to overcome and they must be responsible for their all decisions. As a result, they will gain invaluable experiences for their whole life and become more successful in future.
In conclusion, although parents prefer the offspring to obey their guidance, it seems to me that letting them make up their mind and think on their own is a wiser choice.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...dilemmas in the parenting role. Indeed, the question of whether children should be completely obedient ...
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...r whole life and become more successful in future. In conclusion, although parents pre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, in conclusion, as a result, in spite of, with regard to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1659.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26666666667 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77771428499 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539682539683 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 34.8361242901 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.25 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.25 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310205416762 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119102541837 0.084324248473 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0900390897504 0.0667982634062 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197245585008 0.151304729494 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548328366448 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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