Some people believe that entertainers are paid too much and their impact on the society is negative, while others disagree and believe that they deserve the money they make because of their positive effect on others .Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Hobbies are a part of society and the necessity of their being is obvious. However, there are criticisms about their earning which is much higher than their dedication to society. In contrast, a number of people believe that this is not too much in comparison with the other jobs. In my opinion, their expert to keep society delighted should be much more appreciated than the earnings.
To begin with the opponent idea which are completely disagree with high paying to entertainers. They believe that those incomes are not as fair as their usefulness to community and such payments just bring much inequality to whole society. Also, It may cause the entertainers be corrupted by seeing themselves above all, and own to this, their efficiency decreases which is not in the favor of their audiences. For example, when an entertainer achieved a lot of money and a high level of personality in society, it would be separated from the society and even audiences.
In contrary to the above mention, a great number of people are agree that they are deserve to be well-paid for some reasons. Firstly, entertainment is an art and not everybody has those skills or born with such expertise. They insist that they are exceptional and irreplaceable. Secondly, those skills to provide happy moments to family are not created at a moment and require great deal of efforts and practices. This is not achievable only by spending times and times on that profession just like the other professions.
To sum up, both ideas were discussed. First the idea which is completely disagree with a high level of payment and the second one that considering it is reasonable and necessary to society. In my idea, the appreciation of those arts is necessary because it can delight our modern and isolated community and contributes to be more flourished.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: disagreed
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Suggestion: deserved
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'disagreed'.
Suggestion: disagreed
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, may, second, secondly, so, well, for example, in contrast, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1521.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93831168831 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80458409357 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535714285714 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.435248644 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0625 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.375 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269960171908 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0840558509757 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0614700233214 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150907403088 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0779520143249 0.056905535591 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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