Some people believe famous person people's support towards international aid organizations draws attention to problems. Others think celebrities make the problem less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Many people argue about the effect of the well- known persons when they involve in global aid organizations. While some people think that their action lessens the significance of the problem, I strongly believe that those make community paying more attention.
On the one hand, there is a wide variety of reasons for the less significant of the problem when celebrities participate in activities of global aid organizations. First of all, many people think that these actions just with an aim to enhance their reputation. And even, they have no interest in or passion on those. Secondly, the focus of the public may be shifted away from the problem to famous person’s public image. As a result, the object of the problem may not is obtained and instead of problems, maybe are the raising of fame and public image of the celebrity concerned.
On the other hand, I believe that celebrities’s assistance make a huge positive impact on the problem. One of the reason is that famous persons have a huge number of fans who are willing to support their idol. For example, Vu Cat Tuong – my big idol – one of the famous singer and songwriter who took part in lots of charities. Given that I am her big fan and one of the members of her fan club so I know exactly what one fan club can do for their idol such as donating money from fan club’s member for the underprivileged children and needy patients, delivery food and drink to homeless people. Another reason is that the community is often trusted in famous people so it is easy to attract the attention of community on the problem. Having the well- known person’s support, it will surely bring either money or moral donation to international relief organizations.
In conclusion, although celebrities’s support may have some drawbacks, it seems to me that their activities have an enormous positive impact on the community.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1589.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90432098765 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91631717809 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533950617284 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0291684334 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.5 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.42857142857 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262867079535 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0937376005688 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564807314865 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157907176511 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0456162471082 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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