Some people believe that government money should be spent on important things rather than arts such as painting and music. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The question of whether governments should spend national budget on important things rather than art such as painting and music or not remains a resource of controversy. While a number of people suppose that affairs related to the arts are no need to be focused on, I would pursue that arts presenting for mankind cultural innovations as well as civilization should be taken into account by governments.
Firstly, it is authority’s responsibility that arts have to be encouraged equally as others affairs like defense, economics, health care. The reason is art works could express and exploit the human creative skill and imagination typically in a visual form as painting, sculpture or producing works to be appreciated primarily for their beauty or emotional power. Besides, demand for satisfying human themselves by enjoying artworks is one of basic human needs which could convey inspiration and make domino effects for others to create masterpieces as well. For example, mankind’s ancestors had know-how of using paint on caves or flat platforms thousand years ago to describe their lifestyle and it also was an effective way of communicating. Thank to that, our modern scientists could easily discover our history via remained historical artworks.
On the other hand, if our planet has a shortage in art performances, our mental life will be affected negatively. First, artists will have to give up their passion because no one have attention in their products, they intend to apply for other appropriate jobs to earn their living. Losing those talents and artworks, our society neglects with enjoying color life gradually but just focus on economic or defense issues, chasing the call of money. Museums, cinemas, national parks with painting exhibitions are no longer favorite places for people to come for relaxing. As a result, there will be actions of closing almost of those places by local authorities in order to save budget for other critical things. For further perspective, human still can survive without arts, but our mental cannot be fulfilled with money,leading to our stress and even other health problems.
In sum, government has to give priority to developing arts for citizens to reach a balance between working and enjoy life among people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: Whether; The question whether
The question of whether governments should spend national budge...
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Message: Don't say 'equally as'. You can use either 'equally' or 'as' on its own. When comparing two nouns, use 'just as'.
Suggestion: equally; as; just as
...ibility that arts have to be encouraged equally as others affairs like defense, economics,...
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Line 2, column 656, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a thousand'.
Suggestion: a thousand
... using paint on caves or flat platforms thousand years ago to describe their lifestyle a...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , leading
...ur mental cannot be fulfilled with money,leading to our stress and even other health pro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, so, still, well, while, as to, for example, such as, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1916.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 364.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26373626374 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85680471372 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 176.041082164 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.64010989011 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 37.6362829716 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.857142857 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.64285714286 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160539934659 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0611549060555 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.083665032506 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119272082279 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108862583125 0.056905535591 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.83 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.