Some people believe that the government should not spend money on international aid when they have their own disadvantaged people, like the homeless and unemployed. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, some countries still have disadvantaged people such as the homeless and unemployed. It is thought that this is a serious problem and I partially agree with this view that the government should not raise funds for international aid for some of the following reasons.
On the one hand, while the country is facing difficulties in economy and human resources, the government should prioritize supporting its own citizens over other countries. First of all, the authorities need to build facilities and housing to create the jobs opportunity as well as support accommodation for citizens. In addition, the government should build schools to support children who cannot afford to go to school. For instance, Prime Minister Pham Minh Chinh is donated 10 billion VND to underprivileged people to help sustain their lives. Therefore, a developed country is when each individual in the country has a job to earn their living on the owns and help each other.
On the other hand, the state budget should also spend money to other countries to strengthen solidarity and foster cross-border relationship. Moreover, it is an expression of benevolence, a symbolize human decency for other countries. For example, the government can send human resources to support as well as make jobs for citizens in that country. For my point of view, these solutions can be seen to reduce an unemployment rate and improve people’s living standard.
In conclusion, disadvantaged people, homeless and unemployed still occur in own country so I prefer not spending money on international aid to spending money. This is a solution that supports the own country's development more and more.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'jobs'' or 'job's'?
Suggestion: jobs'; job's
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1405.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24253731343 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04743399869 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.574626865672 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 421.2 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.6379893357 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.076923077 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6153846154 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.4615384615 7.06120827912 191% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249227473517 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.086871646873 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0805822045674 0.0667982634062 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167751574133 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0690788654808 0.056905535591 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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