Some people believe that the government should not spend money on international aid when they have their own disadvantaged people like the homeless and unemployed. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There has been a colossal upsurge in prodigies discussing the topic of whether the government’s subsidies should be allocated to other impoverished countries or tackled domestic issues. Although there is a range of debatable opinions about this phenomenon, I personally agree with the latter statement and will scrutinize it in the following paragraph.
First and foremost, curbing the internal problems means the standard of living in our nation will be upgraded. Residents and dwellers may have more chances to be better off due to the advanced facilities, and infrastructures that the government invested in their own country. Secondly, it is hardly unaccepted that our inhabitants are the people paying taxes for the governments in order to expect the development in living qualities. If the government uses up all these funds to assist the other nations, it may cause a wave of controversy in society, and residents no longer disburse their money for taxes. Thirdly, a range of developing countries faced many negative phenomena such as homeless, high rates of unemployment, etc. These countries are struggling to curb these problems and find an effective method to reimburse the debt which they owned from developed nations. In this regard, it is paradoxical to force these nations to support the underdeveloped countries because it can drive the country to the verge of obliteration. Perhaps the best example of this issue in India is domestic problems widespread in this nation especially in a remote zone at the present day although this is a developing country. If this nation allocates its money to other underdeveloped nations, the living conditions in this nation may become worse.
Moreover, by tackling all of the domestic issues, we can have a chance to put more effort and funds to mitigate poverty in other lands. To be precise, governments in both developed and developing nations should mitigate the negative phenomenon in their countries and then coordinate to ease the other matters across the globe. Obviously, if our residents are satisfied with their living conditions, they can give a hand to the government to execute more voluntary works and reduce the dark side across the globe. However, putting the choice which addressing the domestic issue first doesn’t mean we support nothing the underdeveloped nations. Instead of shouldering all obligations by the government’s fund, the cash-cow business or powerful organization can encourage the resident to contribute their asset for internal aid. Furthermore, the governments in developed nations can give advice to the authority in underprivileged countries about the solutions to escape the illiteracy and poverty line. Consequently, the people who have enough financial conditions may have an opportunity with the government to curb both internal and external problems.
In conclusion, governments in industrialized countries can help the other nations in many ways, not just only the economic aspects. In my opinion, I would opt for the latter option because it’s may help us to tackle both inside and outside issues as soon as possible.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 41.998997996 162% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2638.0 1615.20841683 163% => OK
No of words: 492.0 315.596192385 156% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36178861789 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.20363070211 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04947688523 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 176.041082164 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508130081301 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 832.5 506.74238477 164% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.2876511833 49.4020404114 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 131.9 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.7 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142680980322 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0451686910177 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0394166741545 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0780089646747 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0474952623578 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 78.4519038076 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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