Some people believe that the government should provide financial assistance to all artists including painters, musicians and poets. Others think that it is a waste of money. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

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Some people believe that the government should provide financial assistance to all artists including painters, musicians and poets. Others think that it is a waste of money. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

Submitted by Pritika96 on Sun, 06/23/2019 - 02:20

Providing money assistanship to different kinds of virtuoso in painting and music have a significant role in flourishing skills. Helping like this would be possible wasting of money in many scenario. This essay will discuss both side of this controversial topic and describes my perception about this interesting topic.

First and foremost, artist have been essential assets for any country since 19th century. Also, their products are being to important for symbol of their work. Since giving money by higher authorities to the artist is one type of reward, they instigate to work more and feel confident and create the better work in future. Moreover, today many countries are being to famous by their artist. Also, Poets and musician contributes substantially role for providing entertaiment to the people. Hence, government should support them by giving money. In addition, this money they would use in their skills and improvement a lot. For example, if Higher authorities give assistanship to the local music group then they able to buy expensive musical equipments. Therefore, it is paramount that financial help is required for various artitst.

Moving further, Although financial helping would raises the confidence of artist at pinnacle point, money giving in such persons will not affect the other factors of the country. If government blindly provides help to the artist then it would necessary to verify where they use this money. Because sometime such type of individuals wasting money in various kinds of sector which would not appropriate for them. In addition, utilize money in technology has been major impact in country economy and nation would be developed. Nevertheless spending money in artist will help to country become prominent in the world; owing to work of the masterpiece, nations GDP not depends on work of the artist. Therefore, government should consider other sector for investing money, that would give auspicious future for country.

To conclude, every coin has two sides, providing support to the artist is not an exception. Many countries known by their artist. So, top council must supports them, but they also consider the other sector for giving help like education and medical. In addition, government must monitor their eminent poets and painters where they spent their money. In my point of view, government should provide the help to the artist by minimal amount of money and concern the other issues in nation.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 186, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun scenario seems to be countable; consider using: 'many scenarios'.
Suggestion: many scenarios
...s would be possible wasting of money in many scenario. This essay will discuss both side of t...
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Line 3, column 313, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...el confident and create the better work in future. Moreover, today many countries are bei...
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Line 5, column 50, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'raise'
Suggestion: raise
...rther, Although financial helping would raises the confidence of artist at pinnacle po...
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Line 5, column 180, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ffect the other factors of the country. If government blindly provides help to the...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Nevertheless,
... economy and nation would be developed. Nevertheless spending money in artist will help to c...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d concern the other issues in nation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, for example, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2078.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 393.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28753180662 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62791610637 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511450381679 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 629.1 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.460460155 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.347826087 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0869565217 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26086956522 7.06120827912 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228709887927 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747050771642 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597045382269 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149200751468 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449256508431 0.056905535591 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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