Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is best to try and improve such situation.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is a belief among some people that accepting a negative situation is an optimal choice, unsatisfying job or money shortage for instance. Meanwhile, others say that trying and making efforts to improve these situation is better, Although both views are valid, i am of the idea that making situation development is the best solution.
There are many reason why people believe that live up with terrible condition is the best. This is mainly because the thought that this the flawlessly chance to improve their survival skill by trying to find the solutions to deal with their problems by using poor available elements. Moreover, bad conditions also gives people a lifetime lesson of loving and respecting their properties. For examples, the slums have to face up with numerous obstacles in the daily life such as water shortage, wage discrimination and lack of food. Despite the fact, they always have a bright smile on their face.
In contrast, I would argue that making efforts to improve those bad circumstances is absolutely a better option. Firstly, this is the inevitable results of social changing. As technology development and adequate legislation, the community has improved more significantly than ever before which leads to unlimited opportunities for dwellers to try to make their situation better to a high standard. Furthermore, when making efforts to develop and renew the circumstances which are in low quality, people will encounter their lifetime chances to explore and acquire new necessary experiences. As improvement remarkable demands acquisition of hard work, creativity and courage, and those three vital criteria is not acknowledged by theory or school subjects but by practical experiences.
In conclusion, accepting bad condition is thought to be the optimal. Meanwhile I strongly believe that making attempts and efforts to improve and renew those difficult circumstances is better
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'this situation' or 'these situations'?
Suggestion: this situation; these situations
...at trying and making efforts to improve these situation is better, Although both views are vali...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... better, Although both views are valid, i am of the idea that making situation de...
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Line 4, column 69, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Meanwhile,
...condition is thought to be the optimal. Meanwhile I strongly believe that making attempts...
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Line 4, column 191, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... those difficult circumstances is better
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1615.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38333333333 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96051609615 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603333333333 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7156629763 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.357142857 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4285714286 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26671312341 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0793747232562 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0787478284132 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163896756061 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123455611396 0.056905535591 217% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.