Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In the modern world, higher education in the tertiary environment has attracted worldwide attention. Consequently, this raises a controversial issue of whether pursuing academic training or starting personal occupation as soon as they graduate is the most efficient direction to a thriving career. Although both views are valid, I strongly believe that it is more optimal to enroll in university education for a better future job.
There are numerous conspicuous rationales interpreting why people defend the opposite view. They often argue that working right after school can provide some crucial attributes and experiences that are consistent with a person's intended position. This is predominantly because of the term internship when graduates are trained in a highly active environment which is associated with hard-working, motivation alongside practical skills. This circumstance is the most effective when companies are currently not desired to spend money on practical education. Moreover, it is an ubiquitous belief that personal skills which are identical to the sense of independence are consolidated since financial resources management is the most crucial component at the commencing period of career. Thus, these mentioned individuals have the tendency of becoming more mature.
On the contrary, I believe that pursuing further education should be prioritized since they are associated with long-term benefits compared to the short-term ones of working right after finishing school. First and foremost, academic training can give future employees enormous access to positions with higher remuneration. The preponderant reason behind this is that tertiary education is capable of providing students a significant amount of knowledge related to specific fields of their career at a right consistency, for instance, hospitality. In addition to this, students whose certificates emanate from universities with worldwide exaltation considerably stand a greater chance of being employed in some key positions. It is an undoubted fact that graduates once enrolling in Havard or MIT are often the candidates for staff manager or CEO.
To put things in a nutshell, although conflicting perspectives have been recorded, many people believe that working right after school can be beneficial in several dimensions, I wholeheartedly believe that higher education in the academic environment is the wiser choice for many graduates. I suggest that the government should take the establishment of vocational schools into consideration to acquire the equity between those contradictory aspects. If this recommendation is implemented, preferred outcomes will be comprehensive.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 219, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a person' or simply 'persons'?
Suggestion: a person; persons
...nd experiences that are consistent with a persons intended position. This is predominantl...
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Line 3, column 573, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...on practical education. Moreover, it is an ubiquitous belief that personal skills ...
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Line 3, column 697, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'resources'' or 'resource's'?
Suggestion: resources'; resource's
...ndence are consolidated since financial resources management is the most crucial componen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, moreover, so, thus, for instance, in addition, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 13.1623246493 198% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 8.3376753507 300% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2293.0 1615.20841683 142% => OK
No of words: 391.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.86445012788 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21343056783 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598465473146 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 727.2 506.74238477 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.7942299056 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.882352941 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41176470588 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160087319998 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0447709679675 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542059830789 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0995562566562 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0215256246533 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 13.0946893788 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 22.75 50.2224549098 45% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.0 12.4159519038 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.35 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 78.4519038076 176% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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