Some people believe that unpaid community service should be complusery in high school. To which extend do you agree or disgree?

Essay topics:

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be complusery in high school. To which extend do you agree or disgree?

Teenagers are the future of our country. They are a source of power and enthusiasm. Thus, good management of these power shuold be in concern.

Although many people believe that managing of these energies in social service should be obligatory in high school, the others do not. In my point of view, social service should be introduced an option in high school.

There is no doubt that participation of high school students increases their awareness about social problems, putting their back the resposibilty of finding solution. This also give them the chance to use their talents and hobbies in a well manner. In addition, we all know that helping people make us happier. So, this social activities , especially charity activities, have a positive psycological effext in teens' behaviour, introducing them to be a good citizen.

Despite all these benifits, forcing high school students to participate will overcome all these advantages. In other word, teens will attempt to escape from these activities. It is the psycological nature of freedom in humanbeens, particulary in teenagers, that make them refuse the idea and think about it as an overload. Moreover, mental levels of students are different, make a subgroup who need more study time.

To sum up, community service should be included in high school system as optional activity that increase their marks, with more efforts to rise the srudents awareness about its importance and effect on national development and stability.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, thus, well, in addition, no doubt, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1260.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 238.0 315.596192385 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29411764706 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92775363542 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79700775724 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.621848739496 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 395.1 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.3062461172 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85714285714 7.06120827912 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210759127141 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0660574029445 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0924447945345 0.0667982634062 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124566149726 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115482391016 0.056905535591 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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