Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people’s behavior. What is your opinion?
People have different views about that the impacts of violence on TV and in computer games on society and people’s behavior. Personally, I believe that these elements have adverse effects on people’s behavior, and society is also affected due to some reasons.
To begin with, there are some reasons why citizens’ behavior is likely be impacted by violence in the media. The first reason is that youngsters have a tendency to imitate the violent actions in films and games, which makes them behave in aggressive or harmful ways toward others. In high school, for instance, there is a significant increase in the problem of bullying because of an excessive exposure to violent entertainment activities in the media. As a result, children are likely to become criminals later on. In addition, having access to bad behaviors that are on the TV or in the games, children might be aware of the world around us that is not really safe. And this affects adversely their mind. Children in public places, for example, having a fear of being threaten or kidnapped from strange others on a regular basis, so it is of difficulty for children to develop comprehensively.
On the other hand, it is noticeable to see that people those who has spent more time on watching or playing violent programs, they tend to become less sensitive to the pain and suffering of others. Therefore, it is easier to commit crimes when others behave improperly towards them. And this enables the rate of crime to increase remarkably, and society might be faced with many social problems.
In conclusion, I believe that violence on TV and games in the computer does lead to serious impacts on individuals’ behavior, and these recreational activities also bring more drawbacks for society.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, really, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1485.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05102040816 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88959741878 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0217704084 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.230769231 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6153846154 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7692307692 7.06120827912 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27727777409 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0916626810466 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108330862179 0.0667982634062 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189454667972 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.132924342756 0.056905535591 234% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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