Some people believe that young people should spend more of their time with their families and less on entertainment outside the home Others disagree

Essay topics:

Some people believe that young people should spend more of their time with their families and less on entertainment outside the home. Others disagree.

Many people believe that young people need to share free time with families members while others think that they should have fun outside more frequently. Personally, families activities together are as important as private leisure.
Most people will consider their family's benefits first then think about other circumstances. Children in many parts of the world are taught that they need to show respect and gratitude toward parents who raise them up, then after growing up, they have the responsibility to take care of his or her parents when they get old. Thus everyone should company with families, who are the most precious people in the world, as much time as possible. For instance, people can make a family reunion by celebrating a party, a picnic, or even bbq steaks in the backyard at the weekend. This will tide the nod all family's relationship of every member together and help them understand each other more than before.
On the other hand, people will feel stress out if there is no time to enjoy themselves outside without family members. Research finds that people shall have positive emotions when they are hanging out with friends, chatting with colleagues, or dating with lovers. For example, it is a common trend in many countries for most people to hit the bars and go to restaurants after working hard on Friday night to unwind.
In conclusion, there is no doubt that people are independent of both family and out-family time to be happy, but families still are the main parts of daily life

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 325, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...f his or her parents when they get old. Thus everyone should company with families, ...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, still, then, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1265.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92217898833 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4669137954 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610894941634 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 386.1 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6642679982 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3636363636 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4545454545 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35129016672 0.244688304435 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136568303826 0.084324248473 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10185017362 0.0667982634062 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226189549906 0.151304729494 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0721036350303 0.056905535591 127% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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