Some people do not go directly to college but travel or work for a short time Do you think it has more advantages or disadvantages

Essay topics:

Some people do not go directly to college but travel or work for a short time. Do you think it has more advantages or disadvantages?

The pattern of gap years among graduated secondary students has been sparking significant controversy in recent decades due to its considerable effects on their post-secondary progress. Although the advantages could be pronounced, the disadvantages could justify these.

On the one hand, this trend could fraught with many pitfalls.First, academic procrastination means the reduction in students’ exposure to academic knowledge. This would be obstacles for the acquisition of new post-secondary knowledge, leading to decreased academic attainments. Second, due to young individuals’ typical immaturity and indiscretion stemming from inadequate life experience, they could easily be induced into social evils when it comes to gap-year traveling. For example, many Vietnamese students have been susceptible to drug abuse because of indiscriminately making friends with drug cartels in masquerade as local tour guides, which could cost them significant time in rehabilitation centres before top-tier education.

On the other hand, it is true that delaying post-secondary education for traveling or working purposes could have many benefits. First, by traveling to different regions either worldwide or nationwide, students could interact with a myriad of different cultures, followed by various but unique customs. These practices could stimulate students’ practical skills of curiosity, and activeness, which are of vital importance in making progress in tertiary education. In addition, if young individuals decide to embark on part-time occupations in gap years, they could earn remarkable amount of money for post-secondary education tuitions. This would partly release students from the burdens of student loans, acting as such contributors to their full academic concentrations instead of incurring the loan pressures on a daily basis.

In conclusion, gap years bestow both upsides and downsides equally. However, it is highly recommended that students should balance and organize the delaying time appropriately in order to address the problems aforementioned.

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Average: 5.6 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: First
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.12585034014 5.12529762239 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.39054914423 2.80592935109 121% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.649659863946 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0810222547 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.538461538 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6153846154 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.23076923077 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0672247428068 0.244688304435 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0276154319216 0.084324248473 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0313627905145 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0411695923157 0.151304729494 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0149258974702 0.056905535591 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 23.77 50.2224549098 47% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 18.57 12.4159519038 150% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.8 8.58950901804 126% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.7795591182 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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