Some people feel that certain workers like nurses, doctors and teachers should be paid more, while many people think that other people like film actors or singers should be paid huge sums of money due to the importance of the work that they do and their roles. Do you agree or disagree?
In contemporary society, whether the industry of entertainment or certain jobs should receive a large amount of money from the government has become a debatable issue in many parts of the world. It is argued that film stars are appropriate to live in advantageous financial backgrounds. Nevertheless, I advocate that some main careers, such as doctors, nurses, or teachers, should be paid more than other entertaining jobs for several reasons.
On the one hand, many people believe that celebrities like singers or film stars are considered as their countries’ images because they are surrogates to have face-to-face meetings with famous people from overseas countries on TV shows. To put it in other words, the most well-known MC in Vietnam named Tran Thanh usually has the responsibility to make conversations with people from abroad on lots of programs. As a result, they are indispensable to maintain the countries’ entertainment industry and strengthen countries’ bonds. In addition, celebrities have more free time to interact with their fans through social networking sites, and they usually boast their luxurious daily lives. Therefore, their financial backgrounds can have a powerful influence on creating motivation for people to push harder in studying or working to live in a good financial health.
On the other hand, I incline that nurses, doctors, and teachers are far more important than any kind of job. To begin with, doctors and nurses are vital to save people’s lives by carrying out surgeries and giving medicine. Also, teachers help to boost generations’ levels of knowledge and expertise. This can lead to the prosperous countries by the professional generations. Secondly, these certain jobs have to withstand emotional burdens because they play critical roles in promoting the developing process of their countries. For instance, their mistakes of knowledge can entail a domino effect from generation to generation in terms of teachers. According to an Oxford survey, approximately 90% of citizens are in agreement that certain jobs should be paid huge sums for various reasons.
To sum up, while celebrities can strengthen countries’ cooperation and have motivation for people to try hard, certain jobs should be paid more because of their roles. I suggest that the government should place more importance on medical and educational training than on entertainment or tourist facilities.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, for instance, in addition, kind of, such as, as a result, in other words, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 41.998997996 145% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2053.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 377.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44562334218 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07729577913 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557029177719 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 506.74238477 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.633015246 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.764705882 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1764705882 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1176470588 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337152052227 0.244688304435 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907110857339 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708186358737 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204257363876 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363708957156 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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