Some people feel that entertainer (e.g film start, pop musicians or sports start) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid?
Unlike normal working class, nowadays the salary of entertainment starts are more that of others. Although some people hold the argument that c their payment are unreasonable I did not agree this argument.
Some good arguments can be made in defence of their munch higher income. Firstly, in a competitive and globalized society, in oder to mitigate high pressure, people are willing to pay money to buy for entertainment products such as music, movie and watching sports games. Starts play a important role in this entertainment industry so that they deserve high salary. Secondly , the normal entertainers always make a big effort to be starts. They are more likely to work harder than others or they have more talents. Because of that, they hold a appeal to the audiences. Finally, high salary is appealing a growing number of gifted people to join this industry. However, the number of well-paid entrainers is small because only best people among them could be a star.
On the other hand, it is true that comparing to politicians, scientists and entrepreneur, entertainers are less likely to drive our society moving forward. However, the salary of former are less than that of economists. To some extend, people always have no a better understand of their jobs which need painstaking and elaboration as well. For example the fame of the scientist who invented hybrid rice are less than many movie stars but his breakthrough invention has saved countless lives in the world. I argue that people works in the area such as science , politics and economy should get the high paid as well.
In conclusion, it is reasonable that entertainers get the well paid due to the recognition by the public. Meanwhile, we should not ignore people who work in science, politics and economy and their work is so significant that their paid are expected to increase as much as that of entertainers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1578.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99367088608 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77674202437 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566455696203 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8430086184 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.8235294118 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5882352941 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.47058823529 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 5.01903807615 438% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258553895603 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0725142679415 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440908991887 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148266971442 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274974230769 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.