Some people have been in prison to become good citizens later. Some people think that having these people give a talk to students in the best way to tell them about the danger of committing the crime

Essay topics:

Some people have been in prison to become good citizens later. Some people think that having these people give a talk to students in the best way to tell them about the danger of committing the crime

These days, ex-convicts have been receiving a great deal of public attention and becoming a heated topic. The question of whether ex-prisoners should tell firsthand accounts about the danger of committing crime or not is a controversial issue. I completely disagree with this point of view.

There are numerous reasons why ex-convicts should not educate children about the seriousness of the crime. First and foremost, ex-prisoners who are lack of communication skills which makes students not attractive what they present and easily fall asleep. As a result, the young are not able to absorb handy information effectively from this presentation. Secondly, inviting ex-convicts is not the optimum way to warn students about the consequences of committing the crime. This may trigger the curiosity of the young audience then they would be attracted to the dark side of the story because of prisoner always have a chance to turn a good citizen after getting out of prison.

Secondly, compared to those people who have served imprisonment sentence and turned back to become a good citizen, school and family are considered as the better choice. When it comes to time, teacher and family may take a longer time instead of ex-convicts to teach the young. Last but not least, there is a high possibility that having victims of crime can be a safer replacement, get rid of possible bad things. Victims who are not necessary to speak and only illustrate permanent and visual injuries of victims, This may help students to be exposed to their story and read their sufferings. The young would learn that consequence of committing a crime which never forgives.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 12, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
These days, ex-convicts have been receiving a great ...
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Line 1, column 108, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: Whether; The question whether
... attention and becoming a heated topic. The question of whether ex-prisoners should tell firsthand acco...
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Line 5, column 141, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...crime. First and foremost, ex-prisoners who are lack of communication skills which make...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, may, second, secondly, so, then, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1401.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16974169742 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83117464972 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.60147601476 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 425.7 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8502822772 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.769230769 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8461538462 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.30769230769 7.06120827912 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234609548982 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0739614108299 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620987784079 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156521522191 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0192530445346 0.056905535591 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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