Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Public health and how to improve it have been a regular debate for years. While some people promote sports facilities as the number one solution, others suggest that different ways need to be taken. This essay will discuss both and offer my view.
There are a few reasons why supporters might be right. First is the wide-reaching level of sports facilities for people. For example, there is an increasing number of people who prefer to go to gyms due to their convenient locations and the variety of equipment. Furthermore, such sports places can provide people with knowledge and expertise in exercises and physical health scientifically. To attract customers to use their services, it makes sense for companies or owners to hire qualified health professionals such as personal trainers, dietitians, and sometimes even doctors. Through these staff, people who go to these facilities can get access to reliable tips and techniques to work on any problems they may have. These can vary from endurance, strength, flexibility to high blood pressure, or high level of fat in the body. In brief, sports facilities could be an effective center to promote public health because of its ability to provide people on a large scale with an expert staff.
On the other hand, opponents have their arguments as well. First of all, most sports facilities require a certain fee to operate and not everyone is able to afford it. Besides essential living expenses like rents and food, there are also numerous self-guided workout videos and shows on Youtube and other channels on the Internet. In addition, people’s daily lives are usually packed with many responsibilities ranging from work, school, family, friends...This sometimes makes it more difficult to set time aside to spend 30 minutes driving to a gym and another 30 to an hour running treadmills. As a result, increasing the number of facilities is clearly not enough to improve people’s health. For this to happen, it takes the cooperation of different parties. On a larger scale, governments need to raise public awareness of how taking care of our health is beneficial in the long run. Making more money, getting good scores might give an instant reward but without health, nothing can be achieved. Also, if companies really aim to prosper sustainably, it is crucial for every employee to look and feel their best since, at the end of the day, it’s the humans that build a company, not the other way around.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, look, may, really, so, well, while, for example, in addition, in brief, such as, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2057.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 409.0 315.596192385 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0293398533 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73166744719 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 176.041082164 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60391198044 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1484133951 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.85 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.45 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.45 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322371460302 0.244688304435 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0888407252641 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635173485325 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242734947392 0.151304729494 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0699693803085 0.056905535591 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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