Some people say that to prevent illness and disease, governments should focus more on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that the authority should allocate resources to tackling environmental pollution and accommodation, as their improvement can serve as a defense against illnesses. Personally, I entirely concur with this view because of the following reasons.
To begin with, alleviating environmental contamination has been acknowledged to contribute to the prevention of illnesses and diseases. First and foremost, air pollution has been exacerbated in urban areas, and they also lead to a lifted amount of pathogens like particulate matter or exhaust gas. Hence, since they are reportedly the culprits of respiratory and cardiovascular diseases, it is favourable for the government to invest in their eradication, so that the incidence of flu, asthma or heart failure can be reduced. In addition, another northworthy point is that environmental protection also enhances public mental health. In fact, a prime illustration for this is a recent study at Oxford University, which indicates that a less frequent exposure to noise and light pollution can not only mitigate noise and visual impairment, but also lower the risk of depression or autism.
Moreover, along with addressing environmental pollution, housing also plays an important role in preventive medicine. Regarding sanitary conditions, the poorer hygiene standards are, the more likely viruses and bacteria are to exist and proliferate. Thus, not until the government provides funding for clean water provision or waste management can citizens avoid a wide variety of infectious diseases. Additionally, regarding rooms for households, in densely-populated residential areas, a close contact between individuals is obviously inevitable. Consequently, if policy makers fail to provide spacious accommodations to citizens, this may pose a challenge to how contagious diseases are controlled, and the outbreak of an epidemic becomes imminent.
In conclusion, it seems to me that any measure to remedy ecological and housing issues should be viewed as a prophylaxis owing to their impact on various aspects of public health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, thus, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1779.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.73870967742 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.32725164933 2.80592935109 119% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.658064516129 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8951997897 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.846153846 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8461538462 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.92307692308 7.06120827912 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127758165247 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.041384819497 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0346132285373 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0696345606065 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0106397068065 0.056905535591 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 22.75 50.2224549098 45% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.31 12.4159519038 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.74 8.58950901804 125% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 78.4519038076 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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