Some people say that what children watch influences their behaviour. Others believe the amount of time they spend on television influences their behaviour most. Discuss both view and give your opinion
Watching TV has been drawing public attention. The question of whether the content of the programs or the length of time spent on watching TV has a more marked impact on children's behaviour not is a controversial issue. I totally agree the content of the programs could be the main reason to affect how children behave.
There are several reasons to explain why the amount of time carve on watching TV could be deleterious. Firstly, it is when children get the length of time for watching TV too much, which could make children would become over-reliant on it for entertaining, playing games and among others. This means that young viewers are able to neglect engagement in outdoor activities then lead to spurring an inevitably crippling problem of a sedentary lifestyle, which exerts an adverse impact on their physical health. More importantly, there is a high possibility that children are likely to feel discouraged from having real interactions with others, which plunge them into being devoid of social skills to live in harmony with people around them and hinder their social stride.
On the contrary, many hold a belief that the content of the programs is the main culprit of influencing on children’s behaviour negatively. To be more specific, in most countries, the advent of TV broadcasted show presents glamorized depictions of inappropriate contents such as violence, drugs and casual sex, which form children easily generating many unhealthy habits and improper behaviour. For instance, to alcoholic beverages, if children continuously take their time to watch this advertisement, they will fall under the impression on them and use them without being aware of the health risks they carry. Secondly, in our modern consumer's society, unwary young views could be easily swayed by captivating advertisements for junk foods, products or luxurious vogues. As a consequence, their children may pester their parents by allocating the number of budgets to purchase these goods impulsively.
For the reasons mentioned above, the content of the programs definitely takes its toll on children’s behaviour than the length of time spent watching TV.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: Whether; The question whether
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun hold seems to be countable; consider using: 'many holds'.
Suggestion: many holds
...heir social stride. On the contrary, many hold a belief that the content of the progra...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, for instance, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1819.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 344.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28779069767 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89846282296 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59011627907 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.455372557 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.923076923 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4615384615 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223812527158 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815314249827 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424911961275 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137373388196 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0423930094033 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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