Some people say that what children watch on TV influences their behavior while others say the amount of time children they spend watching TV influences their behavior. Discuss both views and give your opinion
It is true that watching TV becomes a dominant form of recreation. While I accept that the amount of time children allot to watch TV significantly influences their ways of behaving, I still believe that what broadcasted on TV has greater impact on children ‘s behavior.
On the one hand, it is understandable why many people think that the amount of time children spend on watching TV has an important impacts on their ways of behaving. As a matter of fact , frequent exposure to TV might encourage children to develop a passive lifestyle, which greatly impedes the development of social skills and negatively affects children’s behavior. This is because this way of entertainment is extremely addictive, children might spend hours in their room without communication with the outside world if they are exposed to TV on a frequent basis. For example the number of children who show the propensity for isolating themselves from society has been constantly growing at an unprecedented rate owing to watching TV for a long time.
On the orther hand, I still belive that the content of telecasts has a more significant impact on children’s behavior. As children tend to be indifferent to wise guidance given by older people, vivid TV programs with high-resolute graphics which are available on T V can profoundly affect their perception. These programs can heighten children’ awareness, radually encoureaging them to change their behavior to become better citizens. For instance, many crime films on TV in Vietnam inform young students about the dangers of committing a crime and what happens to lawbreakers when they are caught. Knowing that there will be a chance of being condemned to jail, which means losing freedom and living a miserable life in a cell, a children who are having intention of committing illegalities would reconsider going down the path.
In conclusion, although many people think that the amount of time children allocate for waching TV greatly affects their ways of behaving, I still belive that what broadcasted on TV has a greater effect on children’ behavior.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, still, while, for example, for instance, as a matter of fact, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1772.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19648093842 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07958457944 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548387096774 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.1952378498 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.666666667 106.682146367 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4166666667 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406057648027 0.244688304435 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162179944966 0.084324248473 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107005343588 0.0667982634062 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.295531332521 0.151304729494 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0880378201855 0.056905535591 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.