Some people think that children should obey rules and do what their parents and teachers
want them to do. Others believe that children controlled very much are not well-prepared for
their adult lives. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Parents’ and teachers’ supervision over young individuals has been capturing significant public attention in recent decades. Given the common suggestion advocating children’s total adherence to adults’ control sounds plausible, it could be fraught with many negative ramifications related to their future prospects.
On the one hand, it true that youngsters are obliged to follow parents’ and teachers’ rules. First, complying with adults’ regulations could steer children away from social evils, which would breed the juvenile delinquency and felony commissions in the future. For example, without parental guidance, young individuals can easily fall prey to negative peer pressure, including alcoholism and substance abuse, increasing their possibilities of committing more serious crime such as mugging or even premeditated homicide in order to have money to purchase drugs. Second, in many cultures especially oriental ones, total obedience to older generations’ rules signifies the fulfilling of both moral codes and reverence, which stigmatizes young individuals if they defy. In fact, in Vietnam, if youngsters do not follow teachers’ guidance, they would be deemed spoiled and uneducated, which will be such humiliation to a family.
On the other hand, this pattern could feed into children’s passivity in the future. First, Due to constant exposure to adults’ strict control, youngsters have a penchant for feeling the sense of oppression of their inner characteristics. This would provoke the social inhibition and self-undervaluation in individuals in their adolescence, limiting their interaction and connection with other people when growing up as they do not have a predilection for self-expression. In addition, rigid control over adolescents actually could breed youngsters’ higher intentions of antagonism and antipathy against the parents or teachers, hampering their bonding and sentiments.
In conclusion, I believe that absolute obedience to parents or teachers’s rules could result in young people’s vulnerability to self-oppression and relationship collapse. By loosening up the control and attempting to understand youngsters’ preferences, the aforementioned issues could easily be addressed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'trues'?
Suggestion: trues
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, if, second, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1986.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 6.26498422713 5.12529762239 122% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.65143011901 2.80592935109 130% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618296529968 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7178691634 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.769230769 106.682146367 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3846153846 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38461538462 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136581410635 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552744416759 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0274452439149 0.0667982634062 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0931751771187 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0304096378845 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.2 13.0946893788 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 21.74 50.2224549098 43% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 19.32 12.4159519038 156% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.0 8.58950901804 128% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 78.4519038076 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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