Some people think that cultural traditions may be destroyed when they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Others believe that it is the only way to save these traditions.
Discuss both these view and give your opinion.
It is often said that cultural traditions will be ruined if they are applied for tourism attractions. However, some claim that utilizing cultural traditions is the only method of preserving these traditions
First and foremost, using cultural traditions to attract tourists may cause damage to the traditions themselves. They are being commercialized for profit. For example, the moment a tourist sets foot on a place of attraction, he can be bombarded with a crowd of peddlers or a line of shops selling souvenirs and handicraft that are often counterfeit or overpriced. Secondly, traditional jobs and skills will die out as the local people are forced to work in the tourism industry. They may adjust those traditions to fit the tourists’ tastes for making much more money. Therefore, those cultural traditions will be replaced by the modern – style custom, losing the original meaning of itself.
Nevertheless, making use of cultural traditions is also the way to save these traditions which lack of money and labor to survive. In some developed countries, the government can not afford to renovate the historical buildings or areas. As a result, these places along with traditional skills and lifestyles are not presented to visitors in an impressive way and might be forgotten. For a lot of parts of the world, tourism become a major source of income and helps to save the local cultures from dying out.
In conclusion, I whole heartedly believe that people should find the right balance between tourism development and cultural protection. The government have to make an effective plan to successfully attract a large number of tourists while still preserving their distinct cultural traditions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1443.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26642335766 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94720627513 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.591240875912 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 444.6 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6792646134 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.0 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0769230769 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0769230769 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307434940601 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106994989451 0.084324248473 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0771101985751 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189118577303 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458499751399 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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