Some people think that cultural traditions may be destroyed when they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Others believe it is the only way to save the traditions.
Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
It is often argued that utilizing cultural traditions is the only way to protect these traditions from being ignored. Whereas, I wholeheartedly believe that they will be ruined when they are applied to attract more international visitors.
Initially, using traditions to increase the number of travelers can cause damage to themselves because they are commercialized for profits. When the locals are forced to work in the tourism industry they are required to adjust these traditions to meet the demand of the tourists, which make the old customs replaced by the modern ones and lose their original meaning. Not the least of which is that in the peak tourist seasons, so numerous sightseers are there that a quiet village even the remotest island or those natural traditional sited such as ethnic villages located in mountains turn to a noisy market. This may lead to a sharp rise in domestic garbage as well as natural resources consumption which may overtop the support from traditional areas.
Nevertheless, setting culture traditions as money attractions will be able to save those traditions which lack of money and labor for surviving. The government finds it impossible to renovate these historical sites due to the serious shortage of finance. Therefore, if there is a significant fall in the number of visitors, these traditional skills and lifestyles along with a lot of authentic regions can not be impressively presented to international people and might soon be forgotten because of the lack of foreign investment. For example, in some developed countries such as Thailand or India, people do not have adequate finance for maintaining historical heritages or reconstructing traditional buildings. Those Buddhist sculptures might have been eroded away when local government do not have enough conditions as well as money on repairing. For many parts of the world, not only does tourism become a major source of income but it also helps to save the local culture from dying out.
To sum up, I believe that many traditional customs will be adversely affected when they are utilized to make more money. We should find the balance between tourism development and cultural protection.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: resources'; resource's
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, well, whereas, for example, such as, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1847.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 353.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23229461756 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90097158031 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57223796034 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.878974355 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.928571429 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2142857143 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07142857143 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266489622099 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.090894550553 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631649362524 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175468909646 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445283193407 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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