Some people think that the government have the duty to ensure its citizens have a healthy diet while others argue it is the responsibility of each individual Discuss both views and give your opinion

It would be arued by some that the goverment have the duty to ensure its citizens to have a healthy diet. In my opinion, however, this is the responsibility of each person.
On the one hand, there are a number of reasons why some believe that governmet officials are elected by the public, so thay need to be obligated to take care of their citizens.The government can promote healthy eating by making sure that food manufacturing companies follow food safety standarfs and requirements.We have to pay various taxes on a monthly basic, so the government should use this money for campaigns to encourage exercise and healthy diets.It is the obligation of the government to ensure that its citizens have access to all the information about healthcare, health risks, food poisoning or unhealthy eating habits.When everyone was well equipped with necssary knowledge about basic healthcare, they would make healthier food choices.
On the other hand, I would argue that as adults, we should to held accountable for our own actions.If we become too reliant on the government for health, we would ultimately become dependent on them of everything in our lives.The government needs to address various problems such as national security or other potential threats.If the government has to take care of each individual’s health, they would have no time for other sectors, which negatively affects the development of any country.Health is the most precious asset of us and no one can take care of it better than ourselves. Therefore, it is important for us to take full responsibility for our own asset.
In conclusion, although some people think that the government to be obligated to take care of their citizens, I personally believe that we should be held accountable for our own actions.

Votes
Average: 8.1 (2 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, therefore, well, as to, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1495.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1023890785 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99621383544 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535836177474 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 48.0 20.2975951904 236% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 270.57387572 49.4020404114 548% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 249.166666667 106.682146367 234% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 48.8333333333 20.7667163134 235% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 16.1666666667 7.06120827912 229% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25523564801 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149666007219 0.084324248473 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11666978837 0.0667982634062 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188631546404 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.133790495744 0.056905535591 235% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 27.0 13.0946893788 206% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 22.76 50.2224549098 45% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.0 11.3001002004 195% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.19 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.79 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 21.2 10.1190380762 210% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 22.0 10.7795591182 204% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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