Some people think that government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
More than ever in the past, obesity has become very much commonplace among young children and there are individuals who argue that the government is at fault. I strongly disagree with the argument based on the following explanations.
Indeed, the government has a major responsibility to safeguard the welfare of the general public, including health issues. Nowadays, the market of fast food has significantly become more widespread and the availability of soft drinks and soda has also surged across the globe. Consequently, people are more prone to consuming unhealthy foods such as junk food, oily or sugary products, leading them to become obese. Regarding this matter, it is arguable that the government lacks proper mechanisms to tackle the issue, i.e, establishing laws and regulations over the food companies or those contributing to the fast-food markets. Nonetheless, the governments seem to acknowledge their inadequate performance later on and are now trying to implement reforms or backup plans to solve this problem. For instance, they instruct the schools to educate the students more about having a healthy diet, and they make some regulations on the production process of the junk food companies.
Thus, the main reason why I disagree with the statement is that the government is trying its best to prevent the health-related issues which can be assumed as the horizontal impact, but it is the public or the citizens that need to act up to balance the equation in order to carry out the vertical impact. The parents or the guardians are the people who are living in the closest vicinity of the children, and they largely hold the responsibility to monitor the food intake of their youngsters. The children, who are still naive and unaware of health-related consequences, will eventually ask for those unhealthy foods, sweets, soft drinks, and snacks. Hence, the role of parenting figures plays a significant role in deciding suitable and well-balanced diets for the children. To cite an example, the parents can train the young individuals to consume more vegetables and less sugary products which they can later become not picky about the food in their adulthood.
To sum up, just because the government has the responsibility for the children being overweight these days, it does not necessarily mean that the citizens are free of guilt from this issue. Despite the effort that the government is desperately trying to put regulations and educate the public, it is mass people who need to collaborate with the government in accordance with the laws and consciously aware of the possible health issues of the children.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 83, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...ibility to safeguard the welfare of the general public, including health issues. Nowadays, the...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, if, nonetheless, regarding, so, still, thus, well, for instance, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2218.0 1615.20841683 137% => OK
No of words: 427.0 315.596192385 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1943793911 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93137528745 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536299765808 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 506.74238477 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.5708917118 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.866666667 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4666666667 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153328885814 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0524952668464 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354806803693 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0985333912385 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0275366713333 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 83, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...ibility to safeguard the welfare of the general public, including health issues. Nowadays, the...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, if, nonetheless, regarding, so, still, thus, well, for instance, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2218.0 1615.20841683 137% => OK
No of words: 427.0 315.596192385 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1943793911 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93137528745 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536299765808 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 506.74238477 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.5708917118 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.866666667 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4666666667 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153328885814 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0524952668464 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354806803693 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0985333912385 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0275366713333 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.