Some people think that the governments spent money on artists would be better than on more important things. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many individuals hold the view that governments themselves should prioritize crucial aspects rather than squandering national budgets on artists. In my opinion, I strongly agree with this point of view.
Ample arguments in favor of investing in activities of artists believe that those artists deserve this lump sum from state governments seeing that they always have to encounter numorous difficulties, either finance or competitiveness. Therefore, this money would partially help them cover daily expenses. However, I contend that it is no longer the case in the present days due to the fact that activities related to art such as music, literature, movie, and so on have been thriving unprecedentedly in new era. The prime example of this trend is music industry, which is regarded as the multi-billion dollars business. Those legendary celebirties in this sector such as marie carrey, beyonce are leading the fulfilling and luxurious lives. They on their own could make a great deal of money without government-backed policies. Consequently, I would argue that this public money would be a waste if the governments pour into the artists.
This funding, instead, should be deployed effectively on vital dimensions such as education and environment. It is true that more and more people have few educational opportunities due to the underprivileged background. Especially in the underdeveloped regions like Africa, where residents have low literacy and numeracy skills. Government spending, thereafter, should be pumped into this sector in order to help those disadvantaged people eradicate poverty and climd higher in social ladder. Another aspect that is worth being invested is environment because we human beings have been experencing environment deteriotation including natural resources scarcity and global warming. If, for example, the governments subsidize in this sector, then we could at least call a halt to this irreversible destructive effects.
in conclusion, I maintain that government spending should be utilised properly and efficiently in crucial issues instead of subsidizing on the artists.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, so, then, therefore, at least, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1802.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.63125 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18550795596 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.646875 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8906640495 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.625 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162784234951 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0534205360127 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451328797488 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0905513148972 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0234086643846 0.056905535591 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.37 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.96 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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