Some people think that the governmnet is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere.
To what extent do you agree with this view?
Critics throughout both the developing and developed world have debated whether government's investment on art works should be allocated to other areas. Alongside the arguments from both views, the latest discoveries from Hong Kong have provided some insights into this controversy topic. This essay will discuss both sides using these examples to demonstrate points.
To being with, the extravagant maintenance cost is intuitively perceived as a hindrance of supporting unpopular art industry in the modern society. The central reason behind this is twofold, firstly, the requisition of prestigious art works usually require high costs. Secondly, the art museums usually have comparably low visiting rate than other community facilities. In fact, a significant number of countries have wasted vast amount of national budget for the establishment of art museums, which turned out being closed down due to the negligible number of visitors. Moreover, it must not be forgotten that although some countries have prevalence over the art industry, the income collected from the art centers far outnumbered the expenditure required for the maintenance. Consistent with this line of thinking, the investment on art works would further stress the finances of the governments. Therefore, it is conclusively clear that the national budget should be invested to other sectors.
In spite of the aforementioned drawbacks, the upside of supporting art industry cannot be ignored. This is largely because the promotion of national images by art works can attract the tourists, which can in turn increase government's income. For instance, there has been evidently a surge in the number of international visitors since 2008 after the establishment of art museums in Hong Kong. Admittedly, the increase of global visitors can temporarily help boost the economy; however, the expenditure required for the support of art industry is still too overwhelming to be spent persistently. Seen in this light, the government should divert the money to other local businesses instead to stabilize the economy in long term.
In conclusion, arts has a pivotal role to play in terms of government's income, yet, investing money on this in long run could have a detrimental effect on citizens' living standard. Given that the local businesses are weakening, it is predicted that the government will close down the art museums and allocate those budgets to other sectors in the foreseeable future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 4, Rule ID: BEING_BEGIN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'begin'?
Suggestion: begin
... examples to demonstrate points. To being with, the extravagant maintenance cost ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2090.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 382.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47120418848 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96747811662 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568062827225 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 506.74238477 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 12.0 2.52805611222 475% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5929875123 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.941176471 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4705882353 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52941176471 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213282304753 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699953707147 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0338701193689 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129569983111 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0241098089647 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.69 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 78.4519038076 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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