Some people think that hard work and determination bring success. Others think other factors such as money and good appearance are more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
People have many different viewpoints about whether industriousness and persistence or financial foundation and attractive appearance contribute more to a person’s success. In my own opinion, I believe all of these factors are equally significant.
On the one hand, it is no doubt that money and personal appearance play a pivotal role in achieving success. Firstly, individuals who were born in wealthy families have a financial foundation for their development and promotion. In other words, they can easily start up their own businesses with the financial assistance from their parents or they can have opportunities to study in a more qualified education which can support them to get a secure and well-paid job in the future. Moreover, an attractive appearance also can contribute partly to the success. For example, if a singer has a good appearance, she can be more attractive to audiences, hence, she can have a greater opportunity to promote her career.
On the other hand, I claim that diligence and determination are extremely important to people’s achievements. The most principal reason is that not everyone was born in a wealthy family or had an attractive appearance. Therefore, they only can achieve their goals by putting effort and trying their best to overcome difficulties on the road to success. Additionally, persistent people are not easy to give up. It means that once they fail, they will become stronger, more determined and continuously begin again until they succeed. The most obvious example is Thomas Edison, who conducted countless experiments in several years before eventually inventing the first lighting bulb.
In conclusion, although many individuals have opposite views about which factors contribute most to a person’s achievement, I am of the opinion that industriousness, persistence share equal importance with financial foundation and personal appearance.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
People have many different viewpoints about whether industriousnes...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1621.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51360544218 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19819244439 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591836734694 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.972648289 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.785714286 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170424906281 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0627724008832 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500017191345 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107159499165 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0261157588996 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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