Some people think high-end technology can prevent and cut down the rate of committing crime. Do you agree or disagree?
Parts of society believe that the number of law violation acts could be restrained by utilizing cutting-edge technology. In this essay, I partly disagree regarding the statement because while refined technology offers a better security, the perpetrator could adapt to technology as well and potentially breaches the sophisticated surveillance.
First of all, advanced devices offer a better crime prevention tool and turn security systems to become more agile. Because, they help law enforcers to do their job such as mapping crime and detecting suspicious anomalies. Moreover, obtained data from the devices could be connected to a virtual storage system, cloud, thus ease the law officer’s investigation. Drone, one of technological products, nowadays is widely used in many countries as an observation tool. There is a possibility in the future, that drone could be used as a surveillance agent to improve a nation’s defence. However, crime is changing in this digital age and many unprecedented crimes occur since evil doers adapt to the era as well.
Perpetrators are not a bunch of blinded-technology people. They often one step ahead, utilize up-to-date devices. Their modus always shifts from time to time, to break the law security. For this reason, even a super advanced technology which is used in a security system is still possible to be cracked by the villain. Cyber crimes for example. In the past many thought that digital transactions were the best way to secure their money because it was formless. Yet, lawbreakers such as hackers successfully passed digital security and robbed a great amount of money.
All in all, advanced technology might help the police to suppress the illegal activities. Nevertheless, criminals adaptation to technology would be an obstacle to meet a low rate crime society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, regarding, so, still, thus, well, while, as for, for example, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1545.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36458333333 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06992949599 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631944444444 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.4998228203 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.8823529412 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9411764706 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47058823529 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124812196151 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0388021112321 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0343733321493 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0792780352448 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0235509579076 0.056905535591 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.51 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.