Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries, but others think that it is not necessary to travel abroad because all the information can be seen on TV and the internet. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
A school of thought believes that in order to learn about various nations, traveling overseas is required but others think it is uncalled for as all the information needed can be found on the media and online.This essay will discuss both views and I will give my opinion.
On the one hand, traveling abroad to educate one's self about different countries is an excellent idea because one can see things exactly as they are and not rely on hearsay..
For instance, History students are required to visit museums or cultural societies while they are in school, to enable them have first-hand information on events they will be discussing during the course of their work.
In addition, it is more effective to learn about social memes of individuals when one lives with them for sometime.
On the other hand, the use of media and internet to source information about some cultures has benefits ranging from cost effectiveness, to access to a large pool of information and easy access to data but the drawbacks are not far-fetched. One might not get access to first-hand information and will be left with no option but to rely on secondary sources data, which might not be adequate enough for the user.
Furthermore, it limits the knowledge of the information seeker because there is a limit to what can be learnt online as one might not find some of the required information on the internet.
In conclusion, I agree that embarking on foreign trips to learn about the social patterns of different countries instead of relying on the internet and media for information is more beneficial because it gives one access to first-hand information and it is more practical to learn about people's cultures by living with them. Whereas, relying on online materials limits the amount of information available the the individual seeking knowledge.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, whereas, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1536.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98701298701 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75423438547 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512987012987 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 485.1 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.2975951904 168% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.3095194695 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 170.666666667 106.682146367 160% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.2222222222 20.7667163134 165% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.8888888889 7.06120827912 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279776047848 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112861465302 0.084324248473 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0821021499192 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131262148303 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0804882230439 0.056905535591 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 13.0946893788 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 50.2224549098 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 11.3001002004 147% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.1190380762 154% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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