Some people think a job not only provides income but also social life.Others think it is better to develop social life with people you do not work with. Discuss both view and give your own opinion
Many people argue that entering a job supplies people with not only enough money for them to meet their basic needs but also social life. While this idea is to some degree, I sitll believe that occupied individuals should socialize with people outside their wok
On the one hand, it is understandable why many people believe that staying in a profession can help people not only to earn sufficient money to support their lives but also develop social life in their workplaces. Firstly, having a job enables people to have greater disposable income, helping them to pay for housing, bills, health care and education and have a reasonable quality of life. As a matter of fact, a large number of young people switch jobs regularly in order to have adequate salaries which allow their families to enjoy a more decent standard of living. Secondly, in the age of globalisation where different cultures cross, most individuals have to interact with people from other ethnic groups and different tradition. This gives people countless opportuinities to develop social life with inspirational managers and enthusiastic colleagues, which gradually provides workers with a more satisfying working life.
On the other hand, I still side with those who believe that it is better to build up social life with people they do not work with. The trend towards developing social life with colleagues may lead to a decline in the work productivity. If most occupied individuals became addicted to socializing in their workplace, it would result in undesirable outcomes, espcially the reduction of time for work, which should be workers’ top priority. Additionally, people can have various chance to acquire numbers of new valuable experiences and skills if they socialize with people who are not their familiar colleagues. As a result, those individuals can possess a golden selling point to enter the rising competitive job market, which enables them to move up the career ladder and earn a more lucrative living.
In conclusion, although many people think that a job provides people with not only income but also social life, I still believe that it is better to develop social life with people outside work
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, thus, while, in conclusion, as a matter of fact, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1842.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 359.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13091922006 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73772938836 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523676880223 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 582.3 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.7755297798 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.5 106.682146367 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9166666667 20.7667163134 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 7.06120827912 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.477687341113 0.244688304435 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.208705486401 0.084324248473 248% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.165025984325 0.0667982634062 247% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.377370584372 0.151304729494 249% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136617590831 0.056905535591 240% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 13.0946893788 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 50.2224549098 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.07 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.7795591182 167% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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