Some people think that outdoor activities are more beneficial for children’s development than playing computer games. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There has been a colossal upsurge in the discussion that children should spend their time on hands-on experience instead of indoor activities for their mental and physical developing process. Although there are many debatable assumptions about this social phenomenon, I personally agree with the former statement. In this essay, I will cite some appropriate points about this issue before a justifiable conclusion is reached.
First and foremost, it is evident that outdoor activities can boost children's physical and mental health more effectively than indoor performance. Children can keep their bodies supple and limber once partaking in some sports games. Secondly, playing outside can help children have more chances to communicate with new friends which can enhance their social skills and mitigate their lonesome feeling. It is obvious children can know how to cooperate well with the company and cherish the value of teamwork. Thirdly, hanging out even force children to avoid some disease such as obesity, depression, etc, and ease the sedentary lifestyle. For instance, some current surveys in the UK proved that outdoor activities can reduce a range of children's calorie intake and encourage them to stay away from an inactive lifestyle.
Cooping up in our own homes for a long time may have far-reaching repercussions on the pupils' development. To be clear, these pupils using major time at home may be more coward and timid than others. Moreover, exploring the outside can help children widen their horizons and get out of their comfort zone which plays a pivotal role in shaping their personality and ambition. Furthermore, playing computer games can decrease our eyes' quality due to the invisible wave and blue light from the computer screen. However, in the midst of the computer-driven age, teenagers hardly decline the attractive multifunction from the games. Although games cause harm and deter children's health, it is still good if we know how to balance the use time which ensures that we are not addicted to these technological activities. Finally, indoor activities are not always negative for our children's development once spend recommended time by experts.
In conclusion, it is stated that both activities have their own merits. It is undoubted that children can earn benefits if they know how to allocate their time efficiently for both performances. In my opinion, the advantages we can gain from outdoor experiences are much more than indoor activities.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 88, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'pupils'' or 'pupil's'?
Suggestion: pupils'; pupil's
... have far-reaching repercussions on the pupils development. To be clear, these pupils ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2100.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 393.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34351145038 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80607475194 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575063613232 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.3546760618 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.526315789 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6842105263 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.36842105263 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232371498926 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0721764313095 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.040670444715 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140055319187 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0333110076517 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 78.4519038076 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 88, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'pupils'' or 'pupil's'?
Suggestion: pupils'; pupil's
... have far-reaching repercussions on the pupils development. To be clear, these pupils ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2100.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 393.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34351145038 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80607475194 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575063613232 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.3546760618 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.526315789 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6842105263 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.36842105263 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232371498926 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0721764313095 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.040670444715 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140055319187 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0333110076517 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 78.4519038076 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.