Some people think the qualities a person needs to become successful in today's world cannot be learned at a university or similar academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The importance of attending higher education has raised much concern of the public. Many claim that young people can only be successful with the knowledge learned at university, I, however, strongly believe such qualities should be obtained in both academic institutions and workplace.
To begin with, when joining schools with their friends, students can have instant access to career advisors who instruct them to take advantage of the authentic materials of various fields of study. Lessons in universities, in fact, are well planned to place emphasis on building a strong base of knowledge for everyone. By doing this, students have a chance to broaden their horizon before applying theories into practice or researches. Besides, their professional connections are more likely to be established, bringing even more advantages for them when it comes to business cooperation in the future.
In addition, experience at schools is far from enough without further advancement. During the time studying at universities, everyone should be active in seeking for their internship opportunities so that they can get closer to be under employment of a multinational company. This way, they have higher chances to encounter many problems at workplace, training themselves in terms of fostering soft skills including decision making or negotiation. Moreover, participating in workshops in forms of experience sharing sessions will be a big help to learn from the experts in the industry. Students wanting to set their own business, for example, can look for business conference where professional speakers present a method in education investment. The more open they are, the more successful they can be in the long run.
In summary, to my way of thinking, having a prosperous future depends not only on experience at schools, but also that in workplace or social events. Students are advised to both gain enough academic knowledge at school and develop their interpersonal skills when attending social activities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun claim seems to be countable; consider using: 'Many claims'.
Suggestion: Many claims
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Suggestion:
... to business cooperation in the future. In addition, experience at schools is fa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, look, moreover, so, then, well, for example, in addition, in fact, in summary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1706.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46794871795 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99473568359 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.391609127 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.857142857 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2857142857 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.64285714286 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113599765749 0.244688304435 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0388438141967 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461326258897 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0785867313805 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510305243991 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.74 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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