Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Whether should reward students who achieve the highest grades or whether those who show the improvements deserve the award. This question still remains a source of controversy today. I would argue that praising students who have improved is much more reasonable.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why students who achieve the highest scores are usually rewarded. Firstly, this could create a highly competitive environment among students in schools. To win prizes as desired, they will have to give an immense effort into the studies. Furthermore, schools should encourage them to focus on the study to get the best results. Secondly, despite the fact that many schools reward talented student aiming to boost their image comparing with others, attracting many students enrol each year. For example, some educational institutions in my country usually organise events, inviting lots of guests with only a purpose awarding to their students.
On the other hand, I believe that giving encouragements to those who make strides in their study results could be beneficial in some ways. One of the benefits is that this is equal chances for every student to receive awards, they can see that all their efforts deserve recognition and expectation. As a consequence, they will feel motivated to promote all their capabilities in making significant progress. Another benefit is that it may lead to a change in their view about scores. Instead of pursuing the highest scores, they will concentrate the quality of the study. Consequently, several common phenomena which occur when examination coming, including pressure, anxiety and cheating will be reduced.
In conclusion, although it is advantageous to some extent about rewarding highest achievers, it seems to me that it is better to award those who have improved their level of academic performance.
Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'for example', 'in conclusion', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.217125382263 0.247107183377 88% => OK
Verbs: 0.177370030581 0.155533422707 114% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0672782874618 0.0946595960268 71% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0428134556575 0.0501214627716 85% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0611620795107 0.0437548338989 140% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.110091743119 0.122226691241 90% => OK
Participles: 0.0519877675841 0.0403226058552 129% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.77234880644 2.80594681477 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.039755351682 0.0326793684256 122% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.103975535168 0.0861772015684 121% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0336391437309 0.021408717616 157% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0275229357798 0.011925033212 231% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1860.0 1933.35771543 96% => OK
No of words: 294.0 316.048096192 93% => OK
Chars per words: 6.32653061224 6.12580529183 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20517956788 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.418367346939 0.374742101984 112% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.343537414966 0.28420135186 121% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.200680272109 0.203846283523 98% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.115646258503 0.137316102897 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77234880644 2.80594681477 99% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.037074148 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.619047619048 0.56093040696 110% => OK
Word variations: 70.1614169805 60.7387585426 116% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0891783567 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.375 20.7743622355 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3471886492 49.517814964 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.25 127.492653851 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.375 20.7743622355 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.8125 0.814263465372 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.99599198397 0% => OK
Readability: 52.7287414966 49.1944974215 107% => OK
Elegance: 1.34782608696 1.69124875643 80% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353500827926 0.332605444948 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.060240848958 0.102741220458 59% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0442397177935 0.0668466124924 66% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.47047697522 0.534860350844 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.173578427461 0.148594505496 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115916699599 0.134430193775 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.075872069329 0.0742795772207 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.288952502087 0.324371583561 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0498879949658 0.0638462369009 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234241733739 0.228012699653 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547513080173 0.058150111329 94% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.68436873747 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.41683366733 59% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 5.90881763527 169% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.5751503006 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 0.0 1.9629258517 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 10.0 10.4468937876 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.