Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
People have different views about which type of students school should give awards. While many people believe that only students who have good academic results deserve to be rewarded, I also argue that all students who show their effort in learning should have equal chances to be given awards.
On the one hand, there are some reasons why schools only need to reward students who excel at academic performance. Firstly, this could create a highly competitive studying environment, students would feel motivated to try hard to get a higher score. For example, many schools have final tests monthly to examine their students and give presents for students who have the best result. As a result, this would encourage their students to learn harder. Secondly, through selecting and rewarding top students, teachers could easily find good students and have special training for them. This would help these students to nurture and develop their skills and they could take many examinations such as national competitions.
On the other hand, I personally believe that it is more necessary for all students showing their improvement in learning progress to receive presents as an award for their hard-work. First, because of being rewarded, students could have more motivations to study harder. For example, teachers should pay a compliment for their students who improve their study result to show their recognition for these students’ enhancements. If only the best students receive awards, other students might feel disappointed which would negatively affect their interest in learning. Furthermore, fair rewarding would promote learning not only because of the result, but also for understanding. Therefore, students would not cheat to gain higher scores, which help them reduce stress and pressure in learning.
In conclusion, although it is reasonable for students who are excellent in academic performance, I think that schools should give a chance for all of their students to be rewarded to encourage students’ improvements.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1725.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44164037855 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72383913344 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517350157729 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 504.9 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1847787188 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1333333333 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6666666667 7.06120827912 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366636260041 0.244688304435 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144160013452 0.084324248473 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0827529093836 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.272006765884 0.151304729494 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368172808352 0.056905535591 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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