Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Rewarding for students is the good way to motivate young learners to make an effort to gain a laudable performance in important exams. While some people believe that a present should be given only for students who do the best, I would argue that it is essential to give timely awards to students who make progress in their studies.
On the one hand, there are several advantages why schools should offer a prize for children who get the highest position in the vital exams. Firstly, students who gain good marks deserve with a laudable reward which allows them to continue to develop and nurture their talents. Furthermore, a present plays important role in challenge students show the talents to gain highest positions in a competitive environment with other students in their schools. If young students study in these environments, this permits students to have more motivation to learn.
On the other hand, I believe that it is important to award the appropriate prize for students who make progress in their studies. First of all, a timely reward may be considered as a contributing factor in order to encourage learners in making more efforts to gain the best academic results. Also, younger learners who are under pressure of the demand of gaining the top of performances from their parents which lead to some mental health problems such as stress. Gradually, that has negative impacts on the development of young students.
In conclusion, both complimenting students who get best scores in academic exams and rewarding students who make improvement in their study are advantages in their own way, it seems to me that students should be received a present as the reward for their efforts.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'gain the highest'.
Suggestion: gain the highest
... challenge students show the talents to gain highest positions in a competitive environment ...
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Line 4, column 264, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...resent as the reward for their efforts.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, so, while, in conclusion, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1417.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00706713781 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71488033531 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515901060071 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 430.2 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.7280519417 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.818181818 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7272727273 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4545454545 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.388666934799 0.244688304435 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145312841803 0.084324248473 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0854499489606 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25970225135 0.151304729494 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0409692919003 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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