Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.
Children’s upbringing methods have long been a topic of controversy. Many people are of the opinion that youngsters need to be motivated to compete for their place in life whereas others reckon that the ability of working with other people is much more necessary. From my point of view, while kids should receive education in terms of both competition and cooperation for balanced personality development, more attention should be given to sense of cooperation.
Born and raised in a competitive culture, my eight-year-old nephew, Nick has always been told that he needs to be the best. This upbringing method has made him an arrogant kid who sees no friends but rivals to excel. Some people advocate such competition-oriented education while others believe that Nick should be taught how to collaborate with other people instead. From the story, I reckon that cooperation should be given priority over competitiveness in children’s upbringing.
3. For the aforementioned reasons, it is evident that youngsters should be taught to cooperate rather than compete with others. Not only children but also parents and teachers need to bear in mind that nobody is perfect. Before obstacles in life that cannot be overcome with individual force, collaboration is the key.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 320, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...vidual force, collaboration is the key.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, whereas, while, i reckon
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1082.0 1615.20841683 67% => OK
No of words: 202.0 315.596192385 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35643564356 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 4.20363070211 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20934527107 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 176.041082164 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.633663366337 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 333.9 506.74238477 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3484820037 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.2 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3 7.06120827912 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326175609202 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116341854851 0.084324248473 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0760378483925 0.0667982634062 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218003139859 0.151304729494 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346661814648 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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