Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Hitherto, there are several conceptions on the children’s education to become useful adults in the future. On the one hand, there are some perspectives that we should encourage children to have a sense of competition. While on the other hand, they assume that co-operation is what children need to become more useful.
With regard to the competition, I can see some points of the supporters about the benefits of it. As a matter of fact, the sense of competition takes on the role of motivation for the children’s development. The fair competition between the children with their friends or classmates might raise their endeavor to accomplish achievement. However, the competition should only be encouraged in a suitable level, if we put too much pressure on the kid to be better or outstanding for the long-term, it will be counter-productive and even negatively affect their mental health. In that case, your kid will grow up as an individual who is full of envy, always desire more and hardly accept his place or what he owns.
In my opinion, I stick to the state that co-operation is the personality that children need to be trained in. In my country, there is a statement that “if you want to go quickly, go alone. But if you want to go far, go together”. Therefore, I have a great belief that the children who perceive how to co-operate with others might be useful and successful in the future. In fact, each individual can not be perfect, they need their partners for team-working to complement and finish the task in the fastest and optimal way. Moreover, children with a sense of co-operation are usually known as the ones who are open-hearted, willing to share and have sympathy.
In conclusion, it can not be denied that competition is a part of our life for development. However, it needs to be encouraged and controlled to follow the fair direction. Additionally, co-operation is immensely necessary for children to become useful adults.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 111, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, in fact, as a matter of fact, in my opinion, with regard to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1636.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92771084337 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09006198789 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509036144578 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0726848265 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.2352941176 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5294117647 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.41176470588 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.389607805473 0.244688304435 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124260214115 0.084324248473 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.087179887422 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253498579481 0.151304729494 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.078009791809 0.056905535591 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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