Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged, others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become useful adults.
Discuss both views and give your opinion
it is thought by many people that adolescents ought to focus on learning as many different subjects as possible, as it increase competition instinct. Others, feels it would have been better for them to concentrate on normal learning such as discipline, focus and cooperative life which enable normal lifestyle. In my opinion, it's all depends on children interest, whether they want to become extraordinary person or choose a ordinary life. Both perspective will be analyzed in this essay.
To begin with, adolescent around the age of 10 to 17 ought to focus on learning many subjects as possible because they are too immature to make serious decision for themselves which may affect their future prospect. For example, by leaning various subjects, they can develop and understand their interests and skills which often change as child age. Additional, once they understand their interests, than they can easily enhance their skills in this competitive world. Moreover, a population enable to calculate, read, write and learn would be doomed in today advance competitive economies. In my opinion, education and sence of competition only enhance adolescents confidants which will useful for them in future.
On the other hands, there are those who opine that adolescents ought to focus on leaning only. For instance, many children feel pressure from their studies which enable them to take wrongs choices. Some feels that adolescents not keep their parent's expectation and feel some kind of uselessness Furthermore, by adopting a normal cooperative life, it can leads to a stress less, healthy and joyful life which is indispensible for every adults.
In conclusion, I feel that education should be a fundamental for every human beings. It can creates many opportunities and make our live easier. However, competition creates success and encourage people to work on it. Albeit, it's a people choice whether, they want a successive life or a normal lifestyle.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1647.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27884615385 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84535786687 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567307692308 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.029977403 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.9375 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137609722143 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0499973486232 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.033346537865 0.0667982634062 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0887333963294 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0212969701379 0.056905535591 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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