Some people think that social networking sites have a huge negative impact on both individual and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
So popular are social networking sites, like facebook and twitter, that almost every single individual in today’s society are utilizing them on a daily basis with them via a computer or mobile phones. However, despite the potential risks they pose, they does exert more beneficial effects on individuals and society as a whole.
The access to SNS seems to take a heavy toll on the health of people and on the well-being of society. A case in point is that many minors and celebrities in particular, are easily bullied or harassed by hurtful and threatening messages posted or by the unflattering photos spreading on these social networking sites. Once becoming a target of cyber bullying, not only are those victims more likely to suffer anxiety, depression and even suicide, but this also further does harm to their life, work or study. What is worse, such will also lead to conflicts in real life, sometimes even crimes, an undersirable consequence that further detrimentally affects way more people as well as communities and thus significantly reduce social cohesion.
The exposure to these social media sites on the other hand is a facilitator in extending opportunities of formal learning for different people regardless of geographical location, cultural background and age. Compared with traditional education that learners have to be confined to a specific physical room, learning through SNS empowers them to interact with each other on an even larger scale, sharing information about their culture and work collaboratively and this is an significant way for them to acquire knowledge and therefore to broaden their horizons and enlarge their social circle. For adults, SNS, like facebook and skype, is also a useful, indispensible tool for workplace learning thanks to its regular accessibility through which employees could improve their expertise in a flexible way.
Social networking sites more often than not could function as an effective and efficient social media to promote civic engagement. For one thing, an increasing number of both governments and international organizations take advantage of its fast-spreading nature to advertise and to share public information and new rules and regulations to raise the public’s awareness of a particular field, such as public health and political activities. For another, the social network site is also a place where governments or policy makers could gather some information and ideas on whether a new policy should be implemented from netizens from different backgrounds to help them to make a wise decision.
In conclusion, detrimental as social network sites appear to be, they do benefit the general public and the whole society educationally and civically and as long as the Internet and media literacy is popularized, these benefits could be maximized.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 260, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'do'
Suggestion: do
...ite the potential risks they pose, they does exert more beneficial effects on indivi...
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Line 3, column 474, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...re and work collaboratively and this is an significant way for them to acquire kno...
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Line 3, column 788, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a flexible way" with adverb for "flexible"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...employees could improve their expertise in a flexible way. Social networking sites more often th...
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Line 5, column 86, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...sites appear to be, they do benefit the general public and the whole society educationally and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, in particular, such as, as well as, for one thing, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 10.4138276553 288% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2397.0 1615.20841683 148% => OK
No of words: 446.0 315.596192385 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37443946188 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01658846186 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 176.041082164 145% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571748878924 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 773.1 506.74238477 153% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.2975951904 168% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.4318506262 49.4020404114 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 184.384615385 106.682146367 173% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.3076923077 20.7667163134 165% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3076923077 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155446385008 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0565490707483 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0365690820495 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0833152878765 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.019606914018 0.056905535591 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.0 13.0946893788 160% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.51 50.2224549098 57% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 11.3001002004 157% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.46 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.39 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 78.4519038076 182% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.1190380762 154% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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