Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion?
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Some people are of the opinion that students should learn about the food's nutrition and the food- preparing methods. However, some others are opposed to this idea, claiming that it is a waste of time to do so and students should focus on crucial subjects at school.
On the one hand, people think students should devote their time to some vital subjects such as Math, Literature and English because the science of food does not provide them with any useful knowledge to help them pass the school exams and improve their career prospects in the future . For example, Math can help students improve their problem-solving skills as well as critical-thinking skills, while students can write and communicate effectively in various languages by learning about Literature and English. Nevertheless, there is no test or exam about food's nutrition or how to cook food. Moreover, no employers want to know about their cooking skills, except students who want to work as a chef. . In that case, they can learn about them at some vocational colleges. Therefore, students shouldn't spend their school time studying about food.
On the other hand, my firm belief is that it is important for students to study the science of food and how to cook them. By enhancing their understanding about food, they are able to know which kinds of foods are healthy for them and not rely on their parents when it comes to cooking. Since when learning about food they can broaden their knowledge about the nutritional values that the foods contain such as fat, calories, sodium,etc. As a result, they decrease the amount of unhealthy food that they consume like sugary drinks and fast food which are known as contributing factors to obesity among teenagers. For example, at some schools, after listening to the nutritionists talking about food, they said they would definitely add more nutritious food into their diets such as vegetables and protein-riched food. In addition, after some cooking lessons at school, parents are not too concerned about preparing food before leaving their children alone at home.
In conclusion, my firm conviction is that the science of food should be put into the school curriculums so that students can lead a healthy lifestyle and not depend on their parents in terms of cooking.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... on their parents in terms of cooking.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, talking about, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1909.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 380.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02368421053 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63816295659 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497368421053 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 559.8 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.5997345462 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.266666667 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8 7.06120827912 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252344970228 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11025593099 0.084324248473 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742460717304 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189359439845 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0699651791658 0.056905535591 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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