Some people think young people should be free to choose his or her job, but other people think they should be realistic and think more about their future. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
People hold different views about whether youth should follow their passion or be more rational when looking for a job. From my standpoint,it will be wiser if they are given a chance to choose their own career.
On the one hand, it is said by some people that choosing a job pragmatically would bring stability in a person's life. In this case, they should put more attention to salary and job security. For instance, young adults are usually encouraged by their parents to work for state-owned corporations. This normally happens to people from lower economies. Moreover, it would be beneficial if they want to start a family. This means they will become a parent and have to take care of their children's lives and future. As a result, their living cost will be much more expensive. Therefore, youth should seriously consider securing a permanent job.
On the other hand, following passion in job seeking could bring enjoyment for the person. This is because youngsters are able to exploit their talent efficiently. Consequently, they will be more motivated at work and gain achievements without feeling forced. Furthermore young people are brave enough to face challenges that stand before their dreams. The more challenging it is, the more excited they are. Additionally, with extra experiences people can be resilient compared to those who like to play safe. To illustrate, young people's interest to become an kpop idol increase significantly even though the chance to be success is thin
To sum up, it is acceptable to young people to have a career that suits their passion and skill. However, if it does not work out for some years, then they should start to build another plan.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, so, then, therefore, for instance, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1410.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98233215548 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69141994824 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600706713781 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.237884388 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.3333333333 106.682146367 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7222222222 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35659698712 0.244688304435 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106199563191 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540545183277 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233047465187 0.151304729494 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499279966414 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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