Some people think young people should be free to choose the job that they want, while others believe that they should be realistic and think about their future. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is believed that young people should choose a career that is practical and beneficial for them in the long term. Personally, I agree with the idea that it is better for the young generation to find a job that they really like.
On the one hand, being realistic and thinking about the future can bring some benefits for young people. The cost of living is on the increase in many parts of the world these days, and this means people have to find a way to earn more and more money. Therefore, many people at a young age, especially those who have graduated from universities, try to find jobs that offer opportunities for promotion so that they can climb the career ladder in the future and make more money. With a high income, young people can do many things, such as buying fashionable clothes, travelling to famous tourist attractions or sending their children to prestigious schools. In other words, they will have a better standard of living and, perhaps, live a happier life.
On the other hand, I would argue that youngsters should have the right to follow their favourite career paths for two main reasons. Firstly, when young adults are able to do what they really like, they will be more likely to experience happiness and satisfaction in their jobs, which have a range of positive effects on their mental well-being. Secondly, employees tend to be highly motivated and work with more productivity as well as creativity when they get a job that is suitable for them. As a result, these workers can contribute more to their companies and their countries as a whole while earning higher salaries.
In conclusion, it seems to me that being realistic and thinking of the future have certain advantages for those who are still young, but it is more advantageous if they are given the chance to choose the career that they want.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, really, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1524.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7476635514 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53258191135 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532710280374 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 460.8 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.5749535259 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.0 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.75 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.0 7.06120827912 198% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.333252607574 0.244688304435 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123756283008 0.084324248473 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682490425517 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213693196639 0.151304729494 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.022577158607 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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