Some people think young people should be free to choose his or her job,but other people think they should be realistic and think more about their future. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is true that a good job is everyone’s concern. While many people suppose that seeking a job is free for young people, I would argue that they should think carefully about their decisions.
On the one hand, there are two prime reasons why young generation must not be considered in terms of working conditions when deciding their careers. Firstly, contributing to the community is also important towards young people who are the country’s future. Take Ngo Bao Chau who is the Vietnamese youngest professor as an example. During the time studying the Fundamental Lemma, he had to face many difficulties and failed to solve the complex problems many times, they did not choose to give up, and finally, after several years, he was the success in his career path and awarded the Field Medal. Secondly, job satisfaction is extremely important when people choose their jobs. If a person adores an outdoor life, he will not be happy being a stockbroker or financier, no matter that the salaries for both jobs are significant high.
On the other hand, I believe that occupation plays a crucial part in their lives, so they should seek a practical job. One reason is that a wage is an important role in guaranteeing an acceptable standard of living. Being offered a high salary allows for employees to make ends meet, buy a comfortable house and perhaps even go luxury holidays. In addition, a person who is financial independence means he/ she are mature enough to live independently on their own income. To be specific, when they have their desire about their works, they are likely to progress rapidly in their career as the higher salaries or positions.
In conclusion, although youngsters should be free when choosing their future professions, it seems to me that it is better when they have a clear plan in terms of career path.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 411, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...is financial independence means he/ she are mature enough to live independently on ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, while, in addition, in conclusion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1530.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88817891374 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76045364365 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610223642173 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0934331107 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.285714286 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3571428571 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312414075581 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0954832029216 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.080785712368 0.0667982634062 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189625995288 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574579957779 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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