It is true that ex-prisoners can become normal and young people more likely to accept talk with his or her real-life experiment about their experiences is the best way to discourage them from breaking the law. I completely agree with this point of view.
On the one hand, Ex-prisoners who have a lot of valuable experiments could share with young people the reasons why they become criminals and the prisoners have different stories. They will give you how to avoid crimes among young adults and the dangers of committing a crime, they suggest harsh prison conditions. In addition, they always feel bored and stressed. However, so I think that it would help prevent teenagers from taking part in illegal acts.
On the other hand, people make alternative measures to educate young people about the consequences of a criminal lifestyle. So, I think that those methods are less effective. Adolescents can learn about the dangers of a criminal life by watching movies about crime and punishment, but I believe that these types of films are more entertaining than educational. Another way would be for the teacher to teach their student how a person will be punished after committing a crime. If you have a criminal lifestyle, you will be punished by a person of authority such as a policeman or lawyer.
In conclusion, I fully support the view that the people who have turned their lives around after serving a prison sentence could help to deter teenagers from committing crimes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1233.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 249.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95180722892 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97237131171 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68596947587 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59437751004 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 385.2 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4533439438 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.75 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.08333333333 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322554224989 0.244688304435 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0986270920877 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645384016226 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182969824348 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.021821421928 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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