Some people who have been in prison become good citizen later. Some people think that having these people to give a talk to school students is the best way to tell them about dangers of committing a crime. Do you agree or disagree?
It is true that prisoners can behave properly after being released from jail. I agree that the ex-felons can caution students against the crime and following danger. However, I also believe that the role of parents should also be emphasized.
Prison can help convicts realize the effects of their actions, so having them to express their experience of association with wrong friends as well as its consequences may act as a deterrent for future citizens. Some young people show the inclination to hang out with certain people who are powerful manipulators and have low moral values, as a result they get caught up in wrong doings which make them end up in jail for two or more years. Therefore, if they are told to choose their friends cautiously or to know about harsh physical punishment, it is less likely to throw away their life and will be more perceptive about their relationships.
On the other hand, parents also play a crucial role in children life, which means parents need to keep an eye on children by monitoring their activities or whom they associate with, and this may not work out unless they are able to encourage children in open communication, so young people who feel able to talk openly with their parents disclose information about their friends and activities. Consequently, with parental care and control, children are able to stay out of trouble and prepare for the next phase of their life, which is a social life with a decent job and family.
In conclusion, I agree that ex-convicts’ talk can open students’ eyes to the serious repercussions of criminal activities, yet the role of parents is also significant.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1368.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90322580645 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7637546368 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.591397849462 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 415.8 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.2867965306 49.4020404114 191% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.0 106.682146367 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0 20.7667163134 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.2222222222 7.06120827912 201% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143415736939 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0606244903446 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595720993622 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0826182559547 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449791707425 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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