Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is no doubt that people after being in prison are often likely to be good citizens from then on. In light of this, many people contend that ex-prisoners are the best people to explain to the adolescents the negative impacts of becoming offenders. I completely disagree with this point of view for reason that this essay will discuss.
Firstly, there are various reasons why ex-prisoners are not truly suitable for talking to teenagers about the dangerous aspects of being an offender. Perhaps the principal reason for this view is that adolescents should be disciplined in their early years by their parents and teachers. That is when the important education should take place about laws and proper manners in the maturation process of a boy or a girl. As a result, teenagers probably already have a sense of what they should do to prevent themselves from committing a crime. For example, in primary school, students are given discipline about the codes of morality and the legal system and encouraged to become good citizens.
Secondly, the alternatives are more likely to have significant impacts on educating the young generation about crime. One option for this proof is the police, they can visit some schools and have a talk to students. Obviously, police are the ones who have gained a wide knowledge of the offence and they are able to give students a source of information relating to this topic.
On the other hand, it can not be denied that the ex-prisoners have the ability to make considerate contributions to discipline the next generation. That is, after a long period of being educated in the prison, they have gained a deeper understanding of their faults
and make sense of how to correct their wrongdoing. Therefore, it is easier for them to make a speech to teenagers that adolescents had better behave in moral ways and avoid being committed to prison for their offences.
In conclusion, for the reason I mentioned above, I strongly believe that people who have been in prison are not always the best ones to play a vital role in crime education. Besides, combining ex-felons’ instruction with parental and schooling methods of education leads to more positive outcomes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1859.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 364.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10714285714 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84779085469 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554945054945 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.8139376113 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 116.1875 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8125 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25899700388 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0834685802158 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0636317697509 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123407815765 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0535004419569 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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