Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
The role of ex-prisoners in the world today is widely debated, with some people claiming that treated criminals can share their experience with teenagers and encourage them to abide by the laws. Personally, I feel this helpful idea in order to diminish national crime rates.
Firstly, in many countries, the crime rate in teenager has been increasing significantly in the past few years. I believe that the best way to reduce the rate is by having some campaigns from former prisoners. This group of people had changed their life after punishment, sharing their experiences with teenagers and open the dangerous side of crime. In addition, they also become an effective mentor because they understand the condition of these teenagers, as they had faced before. Finally, I believe we should find ways to encourage crime protection in teenager through guidance from ex-prisoners, rather than understanding by themselves.
I do understand the opposing view, which is that the public usually has negative images to ex-prisoners, but not all of them have a bad personality. Although some alternatives instead of reformed offenders could be taken, the results might be less effective. It is easy to replace the gap by a police officers or lectures which documentary films are shown, but these old teaching methods have been resulted in minor progress on students’ behaviors. For example, teachers can show their children a film of good citizens be like and how it tries to transfer some government laws. The result is students frequent consider these methods just as boring theories and simply ignore them.
In conclusion, if the conversation between reformed offenders and teenagers are well prepared, this trend of teaching can be the best option in crime prevent education.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, so, well, for example, i feel, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1502.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2701754386 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8819302037 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.638596491228 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.7530595477 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.538461538 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9230769231 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46153846154 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205746735826 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0638326361742 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.029463310692 0.0667982634062 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109513931917 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326482963235 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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