Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Recently, it is proposed that the limit for retirement age should be raised in response to higher life expectancy of senior citizens. From my perspective, retirement age should remain unaltered rather than being extended due to some reasons as followed.
First of all, raising retirement age causes higher unemployment rate. It is a disputable fact that if old laborers have a chance to work longer, young people will have to compete with them to have stable jobs. Therefore, having the age of retirement unchanged would create more career opportunities for jobseekers.
Moreover, there is undoubtedly a variety of health problems relating to old age that should not be ignored. It is undeniable that the older people become, the more serious diseases they have to struggle with. In fact, many surveys illustrate that the percentage of patients aged over 60 is higher than that of younger people. If workers have to work after 60 years old, they may get more risks of serious diseases such as heart attack or stroke because of workplace stress.
Some opponents may argue that the old does not lose their efficiency, they look after themselves very well and therefore stay young. However, the fresh and motivated workforce has more productivity than elder ones. Moreover, after working for at least 33 years, most people seem too tired to keep working especially in competitive working environment. So, this mostly forgotten aspect of the retirement age must be addressed properly in any decision-making.
To sum up, increasing the retirement age has a negative impact on not only old individuals themselves but also the younger generation. Therefore, there is no doubt that government should not raise the mandatory retirement age.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1464.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22857142857 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8295452869 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621428571429 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 22.1816741178 49.4020404114 45% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.6 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.93333333333 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263500699981 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0860182135381 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482050386617 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146354044031 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0329393662783 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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