Some think that only those people who have worked
for a company for many years should be promoted
to a higher position. Do you agree?
There is an opinion that primarily staff members who have dedicated
many years to working for a particular company should be given
executive positions in a company. I disagree with this viewpoint in as
much as younger workers may have more skills and if not provided with
an opportunity for a promotion, they will become demotivated.
Although senior employees have proved to be reliable and loyal, more
often than not, it is novices who have a wider cluster of actual skills. This
is because young specialists exert their full effort in mastering their hard
and soft skills in order to meet the requirements of today’s highly
competitive job market. Therefore, having been promoted, such workers
may bring innovation and help to better incorporate the latest
technological advances into business processes, which is irreplaceable
for every company to flourish. For example, the average age of a new
hire at Facebook is only 23, for this very purpose.
Yet another reason why less experienced staff members should have
even chances for a promotion is that otherwise they will not be motivated
to do their best. Knowing that however hard they try, they still will not be
given a higher position in a company, young employees are likely to
grow reluctant to go the extra mile, which may negatively affect a
company’s revenue and curb its development. To illustrate, a prominent
IT entrepreneur (wrote enTERpreneur on the exam) Pavel Durov had to
leave his first workplace since despite his outstanding abilities, he was
not rewarded with a leading role. As a result, he has successfully set up
his own business, while his employer lost his company due to a lack of
highly qualified workers.
To sum up, even though individuals who have worked fewer years for a
particular company might be less trustworthy, they should be equally
promoted as they have up-to-date knowledge and skill sets. Besides
that, this will encourage them to apply their abilities to the fullest, thus
contributing to the prosperity of a company.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, thus, while, for example, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1740.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 334.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20958083832 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85978144043 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625748502994 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 39.6102540035 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.0 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8333333333 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.08333333333 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 30.0 4.38176352705 685% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312837239041 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111227228787 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107651643008 0.0667982634062 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0682812269922 0.151304729494 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0880110657931 0.056905535591 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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